The opening dialogue immediately pulls the reader in and creates a sense of mystery. "You can float in the plane" is an intriguing hook that makes the reader want to find out more. Well done on the engaging opening line. You do a good job setting the context at the beginning - explaining how you and your friends had lost touch after high school but later reconnected when you learned Ron had become a pilot. This backstory helps ground the story. Nice Job!
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