Hello @patience37, and welcome to The Ink Well. Thank you for sharing your story with us, and for reading and commenting on the work of other authors.

We always include some tips and resources with our welcome message. Please be sure to check out the following resources:

• Our Tips, Reminders and Guidelines provide all the important things to know about being successful in The Ink Well.
• Our Catalog of Storytelling Tips includes links to many helpful articles. In particular, we recommend that you read the article on Action, Dialogue and Narrative is an excellent tutorial on the importance of including all three of these elements in your stories. And the article on dialogue provides tips for dialogue so you can get your characters talking to one another.

Good luck and again, welcome.