Hi @neotopher. This is an interesting story, and nicely written. Thank you for sharing it in The Ink Well.

We have one suggestion for you about engagement in the community. It is best to write comments on other writers' work that indicate you read the story. Generic comments about dancing or about the name of a character in the story you read do not relate back to the story, which means the writer cannot benefit from them or enjoy the knowledge that the reader read the story with interest.