Hi @fantom22. Thanks for sharing this post in The Ink Well. Is it a fictional piece? As you hopefully know if you have read our community rules at the top of The Ink Well community page, we only accept fictional short stories.

The common elements of fiction include made-up characters, a plot or conflict, action, dialog between the characters, and a resolution of the story conflict. Your story is a very enjoyable piece, but we're missing characters, action, dialog, etc.

The Ink Well has some great resources in our catalog of fiction writing tips. For example, we have tips on developing characters in your stories, and integrating action, dialog and narrative.

Keep writing!