I do feel sad for the dogs 🐕😭

A really interesting use of the prompt and it has an exciting quality to it which makes me think of a spy film or something.

May I make a small suggestion? I hope it's helpful. Try to avoid too much repetition of the same word in a paragraph, such as your first one with the repetition of dogs. Could this work?

One of the dogs attacked the person trying to jump in, killing him by locking its teeth into the man's neck. The second criminal shot both the others as they leapt towards them.

I hope this makes sense. 🙏