What a disappointment after everything he went through — even risking his life — to see Kate on her birthday!

I hope you are open to feedback on your story, @fashtioluwa. In addition to the information in @theinkwell's comment, I would like to suggest that your break up your long paragraphs into sentences. For example, your first paragraph is several different sentences strung together as one, making it very hard to read.

Here's how I would recommend breaking this up into separate sentences.

Here is the paragraph as you wrote it:

It was Kate's birthday on the 1st of October when I checked my calendar, the date was the 30th of September, we both live in different cities and she had been one of my best friends, she even accommodated me while we were still in school when I had no place to stay after I thought of all the good things she had done, I decided to get a cake and surprise her on her birthday, it was just a few hours to go, so I hurried to the bakery, I got the best cake, I went to the market also to get her a gift, by the time I would check the time, it was already 8 pm and her city was 3hours away from my city but I still decided to embark on it because I really wanted to surprise and let her know how much I love her.

In the following, I have added punctuation. To show you where each sentence should end, I have made the first word of the new sentence bold.

It was Kate's birthday on the 1st of October. When I checked my calendar, the date was the 30th of September. We both live in different cities and she had been one of my best friends. She even accommodated me while we were still in school when I had no place to stay. After I thought of all the good things she had done, I decided to get a cake and surprise her on her birthday. It was just a few hours to go, so I hurried to the bakery and I got the best cake. I went to the market also to get her a gift. By the time I would check the time, it was already 8 pm and her city was 3 hours away from my city but I still decided to embark on it because I really wanted to surprise and let her know how much I love her.

Do you see how you wrote 8 sentences as if they are one long sentence?

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