Hello @iamphenomenal,
Would you clarify for us that this is indeed a story and not a memory? Thank you!
Taken as a story, it has a workable arc and some character insight. Also has an interesting twist. Welcome to the Inkwell. We encourage you to read our rules and our Manifesto.
We welcome new and established writers to the community. Hope to read some interesting short stories from you.
RE: The Bus stop