Hmm... Despite the little pronoun errors(on Zahra's part mostly), confusing quotations, and unclarity, I actually really enjoyed your story! But above all, I think what I enjoyed the most was your passion!

Yes, you managed to encompass so much passion into your character, that I was left spellbound at every turn. Ah yes, I couldn't help but feel empathetic towards the protagonist. Break ups are hard indeed.