You get bonus points for maintaining a consistent voice. Bravo. It seemed for a bit that we were lost in a 19th century horror story. But then, the truth is revealed: the protagonist/target of this story is a poor writer. It is a tale within a tale, at times confusing, but nonetheless interesting.

Bonus points for being adventurous in your writing. The prompt is well addressed. As a matter of fact, it seems the whole narrative is almost lost in the shadows.
The story would have been easier to read if it had been presented in traditional prose form (not centered as it would be in verse.)

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