Hello @raymondpeter,

This is a sweet story. It's good you kept the moralizing within the voice of the grandfather that works well.

This story is full of dialogue, which is this week's skill challenge. It is hard to keep track of the dialogue when reading, though, because it is not formatted properly. Here are two articles that describe how to format dialogue:
https://www.grammarbook.com/blog/effective-writing/diving-back-into-dialogue-part-ii/

https://www.grammarbook.com/blog/quotation-marks/internal-dialogue-italics-or-quotes/

If you have any questions, after reading these articles, you can tag @agmoore and she will gladly try to address your concerns.

Thank you for sharing this story with us. We appreciate very much that you engage with other authors in the community. That support is welcome by those writers.