You spin an entertaining tale, @omosefe. Your pacing is excellent. It moves the story forward. Dialogue also is good. It seems you like to write and have a knack for it. You should fit in nicely in our community.

Please acquaint yourself with our rules so your integration into Inkwell culture is seamless. One thing we ask of each author is that they comment on at least two stories for each piece submitted.

Thank you for sharing this with us. One note you might like to read @jayna's essay on author intrusion. When you do, you might rethink that last line in your story.

We look forward to reading more stories (and creative nonfiction) from you. We are happy you have found us.