This is a fun story, @moclassic. You've done a nice character sketch of Mama Pickle and created a good backdrop for the story.

We have some feedback for you. First, it is difficult to know whether this is fiction or nonfiction. Just in case you aren't sure of the difference, fictional stories are made up from your imagination, while creative nonfiction stories are real life stories. Either way, as a story, this is missing a few ingredients. There is no "story conflict" and no "story arc." These are important aspects of any short story, whether it is fiction or nonfiction. They provide the reason for the story to be told.

Here are some articles we recommend in our catalog of fiction writing tips:

• Adding conflict
• Story arcs

Good luck and keep writing!