What a fast-paced and interesting story, @kriszrokk! We have some feedback that might make your stories even more engaging. Without grounding elements like dialogue tags, narrative, and setting/scene change descriptions, the reader can have a difficult time keeping in step with the author's intent.

We recommend having a look at some of the helpful articles in our catalog of writing tips:

• Story settings: @theinkwell/writing-tip-33-what-is-your-story-s-setting
• Action, dialogue and narrative - the dynamic trio: @theinkwell/writing-tip-of-the-week-26-action-dialog-and-narrative-the-dynamic-trio
• How to write dialogue: @theinkwell/writing-tip-36-how-to-write-dialogue-in-fiction