What a lovely story, @janaveda. You have beautifully captured the tensions of the holidays, and how they can be swept away when the true spirit of the holiday finds its way into people's hearts.

Your story is told fully in narrative, but would benefit from action and dialogue. We recommend our article, Action, Dialogue, and Narrative: The Dynamic Trio.

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