This is a touching story, @fantom22. It shows the plight of a family with limited means facing a health crisis. The couple's community helped them to get through the crisis, which is a very nice resolution to the conflict.

Your story would benefit from further character development, and we would love to see interaction between your characters in the form of dialogue. Be sure to check out our articles on character descriptions and "Action, Dialogue and Narrative: The Dynamic Trio.

Thanks for sharing your story in The Ink Well, and for reading and commenting on the work of other community members.