What a clever way for the fort to maintain security, rumors are very powerful. The dialog here flows smoothly between the group. However, it would have been nice to see some more development of your characters and emphasis on the action.

The Ink Well has some great resources in our catalog of fiction writing tips. For example, we have tips on developing characters in your stories, and integrating action, dialog and narrative. These resources can help you learn how to include the important elements of fiction in your stories.

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