Well told, @fantom22. You build the suspense so that we do worry for the girl when she is lost and alone. Your description of the stranger (the major) is also very good. He really seemed scary. Fortunately he was a good man. It seems Katrina learned an excellent lesson.

We really appreciate that you are such an active participant in the community. Your comments to other writers are on point. Thank you for sharing this 'fly' story with us.

Edit: It would improve your story if you proof read it more carefully. There are some minor, avoidable errors. Just a tip.