Hello @faitz007
Your story touches on different facts of life, with some valuable life and family lessons. You have tagged this as fiction. Is that correct? The delivery of the story sounded like you are the dad.
Make sure to tag your stories correctly, as this will help readers to connect with your story.
You seem to have a keen interest in writing, so we suggest that you check out our writing prompts (fiction and creative non-fiction) that are both pinned on our community's page. These prompts are a good opportunity for you to practice and develop your writing skills, and it would be great to see more of you around the community engaging with other authors:)