Hi @dlmmqb. Thank you for joining us in The Ink Well and for reading our community rules. We are a short story community, and we welcome writers of all abilities. We ask our community members to read and comment on the stories of other writers in the community. This makes our community stronger, and is also a great way to learn more about the craft of story telling.

We often provide feedback to writers who are just getting started. Your story is very short, so a reader may be left with questions. You might want to work on a longer piece next time. You could add some details about the character, for example.

The Ink Well has some great resources in our catalog of fiction writing tips. For example, we have tips on developing characters in your stories, and integrating action, dialog and narrative. These resources can help you learn how to include the important elements of fiction in your stories.

Good luck and keep writing.