You have such a wonderful imagination, @clemenp. This story is part fantasy, part science fiction, and the storyline is very clever.

Be sure to check out our article on How to Write Dialogue in Fiction to learn the correct formatting for dialogue.

For example, you are using a dash at the beginning of each thing a character says. However, you should use quotation marks, like you have at the end.

Instead of writing it like this:

-Hello daddy," said the robot, looking tenderly at its creator.

You should write it like this:

"Hello daddy," said the robot, looking tenderly at its creator.

Also, please remember to engage with other community members. We expect everyone who posts in The Ink Well to read and comment on at least two other stories for each one published in the community. Thank you!