Lucia's grief quietly shapes this story and leads it to its restrained and effective ending. Two simple things would strengthen this piece considerably: Firstly, a more subtle story title that doesn't give away the end of the story 😉 and, secondly, an edt in Google Docs or Grammarly of your original native language version so that the English translation reads as well as it can. Also, bear in mind that translations from Spanish to English should still be perused to identify common translation issues around dialogue speech marks and gender switching of characters, both of which are present in your piece.There is also a short section where you repeat the same phrase/sentence 3 times over in the English version. Overall, I enjoyed this read. It had a lot of potential.