Hi @chizzini. Welcome to Hive and welcome to The Ink Well! It looks like you have started to familiarize yourself with our community and to engage with other community members by reading and commenting on their work, which is great.

Your story is interesting and provides a view into a terrible situation, with a very dramatic conclusion. You have a good sense of the mechanics of storytelling.

Here are some resources to help you on your journey as a writer:

• Check our the resources in our catalog of fiction writing tips. These articles can help you learn some of the important techniques of fiction writing and some of the "do's and don'ts."
• Be sure to check out our article titled Help for the Grammatically Challenged. This article provides some tips for improving grammar. For example, you can use Google Docs or the free version of grammarly.com.

For example, if you used these tools, they would point out that the word "soard" is not a word in this sentence;

I was maltreated, I was only given soard food to eat. I wasn't cared for.

As a final note, be sure to read our article on violence and brutality in stories in The Ink Well. We have policies for this to make sure the content in our community is safe for all people of all ages. (We were glad to see the uncle did not cut off her hand!)

Thank you! And again, welcome.