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You wrote well.. there's lots of lovely detail here that helps the reader visualise the scene. You leave me wanting to know what happens next, even if I find the boyfriend rather simpering, as if he has no life of his own. She's certainly a mystery, drawing him into her flame without hardly doing anything at all! I felt more sorry for him than her 😂..
RE: Entanglement: A Romance Fiction [ENG/ESP]