Yes, Much clearer.

I didn't understand that by "NO" she meant to stop the experiment, even though she apparently saw the mutant first time in her life and probably thought he'd kill or eat her. )))

Bounty hunter? Yeah, I didn't get that. I thought he was a previous patient of Dr. and now he wanted to get back to the doctor for that.

Also, the entire premise of the council from another dimension isn't very clear. Why did it need people or mutants? That requires a more extended setup narrative.

In that respect, I don't understand the 700-word limit. Who imposes it and why? The story should go the way it goes. It might take 20 words or 2000. What if it would be more than 700 words it won't win the prize? Who cares? I don't even know how long was my entry...

Anyhow. Good luck to you!