RE: RE: Just Beneath the Skin (Short Story) - Finish The Story Week 67
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RE: Just Beneath the Skin (Short Story) - Finish The Story Week 67

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Hi mgaft1@mgaft1

It's a little difficult to fill out the story to the full extent that I would like with the 700 word limit... but all the clues are there with a careful read ;-)

Basically, Unit 25678 is a cybernetic enhanced human bounty hunter type from the alternate dimension that they researchers are also from.

He engaged all systems. Silicon heated as he flexed his hands, Kevlar skin tightened against knuckles.

From the first section

Doctor Parker spun, eyes bulging when he saw the array of cybernetic enhancements this intruder displayed. Parker glanced at Unit 25678 face, the only part of him fully unmodified.

From the forth section, also in this section Parker recognizes Unit 25678 making a connection between them and showing that they're from the same reality/dimension.

Unit 25678 knocked out Doctor Parker, and interfered with Clara White's genetic transformation because he was taking them both back to the alternate dimension to hold them to ransom to the council.

Unit 25678 recognized that face, Aldernan Parker, chief of the research arm for the council's genetic manipulation program.

From the forth section, showing clearly that the doctor is the head of research.

The one thing that I do think didn't come across amazingly well was that the research being done on Clara White had turned her into a genetic mutant with lizard DNA. f3nix@f3nix's subtle use of a neodymium lamp (the type of lamp that is used in pet lizard enclosures to mimic sunlight) was why I wanted this lizard DNA mutation theme, also that various lizard species can regrow limbs which fits in with the idea that she'd recovered from organ failures.

So Unit 25678 - the full mutant as I understood, gave Clara White some water. Then she said "No" Why?

"Water, please."

Her still-human eyes darted to the glass next to the bed. He lifted it to her mouth, some of it dribbled over her snout.

The intravenous tubes gurgled and she gasped. "No!"

From the final section. Clara is saying 'No' to the gurgle of the pipes, she's asking for Unit 25678 to stop the drugs being administered.

Then Unit 25678 fires up the dimensional portal to take his double bounty (of Clara White and Dr Parker) home. I think that this paragraph in section 4 is quiet important to making sense of it all as well.

Security was lax at this facility. This operation was running on the basis of 'out of sight, out of mind.' This type of inter-dimensional field research was a new slant on the councils outreach program. They thought no one knew about it.

Hope this clarifies things a little. It is kinda difficult to give a solid impression with the word limit while trying to stick to the 'show don't tell' rule.

I'm glad you enjoyed the ending mgaft1 :)

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