Usa ra kasi dapat ang narrator ana and it is his or her POV. If you wanna keep writing and improve on it read novels pud and assess how they are presented and learn from them. Also Wattpad is an app for things like these, my daughter makes stories there. You need to at least get to the technical stuff of writing first because writing is very technical. I can see your passion and that is a good start. I'm not an expert but I know you can do more. Also, Grammarly will be useful.