I enjoyed your story, @young-boss-karin. What a romantic way to meet a new special person! Too bad Jess has to get involved in her brother's choices.

I was a little confused by the beginning. I had to read it a few times to realize that the first girl is his sister and is different from the girl referenced in the sentence, "He snorts but smiles at her exaggerated comment and turns his face just in time to see her."

Just a suggestion! You might want to change the sentence to something like, "He snorts but smiles at his sister's exaggerated comment and turns just in time to see an attractive woman walking through the door." Then we'll be able to see that there are two different women, and he's related to one and attracted to the other! 😊