Learning the craft of writing is a long process, @uchelee. But you are doing many things really well. You can build on that. You have nice character descriptions and you also have a nice sense of how to write dialogue.

Since you are keen to learn and improve, I'll provide a few tips for you.

1. It's important to decide who's story you're telling. Is this Jide's story? Or is it Amanda's story? The story should then be told in that person's point of view ("POV"). In this story, sometimes the POV is Jide and sometimes it is Amanda. This is known as "head hopping" in fiction. The reader wants to know who to care about. That's the person whose view we should experience throughout the story. (Obviously, in longer stories and novels, that can change, but there would be an entire scene or chapter in one POV, then a clear shift to another POV.)
2. Avoid telling any part of the story from an outside (e.g. the author's) POV. When the story shifts to an opinion about the characters, we call that "author intrusion." You can read about it in our author intrusion article in our catalog of fiction writing tips.

Here's one example of where that appears in your story:

Being the egoistic man he is, he decided there and then that he needed to tame the euphoria, "be a man", and not show his hand.

Since it's likely not Jide referring to himself as egoistic, then we can only assume it is the author.

I hope these tips are helpful! Keep writing!