Hi @ubani1! Great to see a new story from you. I liked the mystical feeling of this one.

I have a recommendation for you. The first two sentences are a bit odd, and it's hard to understand what they are trying to say. It's your story, of course, and this is just an idea for you to consider. What if you removed the first two sentences and made a few edits to the third to make it a strong first sentence, like this:

The books and stories of ancient beings led to the place, and to secret portals that link a mortal to the Heavens.

This sentence would draw in a reader and make them wonder: What place? What secret portals?

Again, it's just an idea!