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Great story, ubani1@ubani1. It was very suspenseful at the end! We are left hoping that Mr. Bethel will be treated will recover. I dared to hope that saving a child's life might even help him to renew his quest to live life fully. You did a very nice job in this story with character development, and including great scene descriptions and dialog.

There is one place where you might want to edit. The first sentence is a bit hard to understand. Maybe instead of "shrine" you mean "shone"?

@jayna: Great story, | Ecency