Oh my, @ubani1. I am left with so many questions. At first I was not sure who was viewing that vivid scene of mud and rain. (Well done on the scene setting for your mystery!) And then I see that it is three people — Aunt May, the protagonist (her niece) named Joyce, and a third person named Jenny. But who is Jenny, and where does she go when Aunt May goes to the shop? And then in the end, how could it be her mother who is no longer living? Does this mean Joyce died or that her mother is still alive...?

You have some wonderful story elements here. The scene setting, characters, conflict and suspense are very well done! I only wish you had given us just a bit more to resolve your story. But its intensity and drama are highly captivating! I really enjoyed reading it.