I always enjoy your stories, @rammargarita. They are full of heart and passion. And I really like your drawings.

I have some feedback for you. There are a few errors you could easily fix.

The first one is that you refer to Mafe as a "son" (which is a boy child) instead of a "daughter," and many times you refer to her as "his" and "him" (which are pronouns for males), instead of "her."

For example, in this line, it should be "her father says to her"

In the morning, while eating breakfast, his father says to him:

Also, this whole section appears in your story twice:

In the morning, while eating breakfast, his father says to him:

"I have declared bankruptcy, I have lost almost all my money. I have to leave the country as soon as possible, my associates are looking for me to kill me, I have the feeling that I will never see you again, nor will I hear from you, I have all my phones tapped". Maria Fernanda expresses to him:

"I love you, father you are going through this situation I understand you, it is better for you to escape, I know I will not see you anymore, but I have your memories, as the best father in the universe". The three of them hug and cry" Lesvia tells him:

"God bless you".

Freddi, can't hold back the tears and leaves quickly.
Mafe cries inconsolably, her mother consoles her.

"Calm down, we will get through this with God's help".

They move to a house of low social status, Lesvia returns to work in the Financial Bank, with that floor she can cover some expenses. The young woman retires from the modeling academy.

Maria Fernanda is moving with her blind man's cane along an avenue she hears her call she asks:

"¿Who is it?"

"It's Fabiola, the director of the modeling academy, I'm telling you."

"Next month, there is a beauty contest abroad to opt for the title of miss Universe, You have to go in representation of our Country." Mafe states:

So you might want to remove one of them. Good luck and keep writing!