A very imaginative story, Hive account@popmanj. Thank you for adding the paragraph breaks! I waited to read it until you did so. I really enjoyed this story.

I have a bit of feedback for you. I encourage you to consider leaving out the "moral" component of your stories. It is not needed for a story to be successful, and many readers would rather not feel that they are listening to a preacher's sermon while reading fiction. This story would be just fine (better, in my opinion) without the morality statements about God.