Chris was a spoiled child from the beginning. If a grown person throws a tantrum and destroys property to get their way, you know they have been rewarded all of their lives for bad behavior. The parents certainly had some blame in that!

Your story is good. You might want to work on some of your formatting and punctuation. For example, in the opening of your story, none of your sentences end in a period.

We have some great resources that can help you on your writing journey. Please see our catalog of fiction writing tips which provides many resources for writers who are just starting out. In particular, please see the post Help for the Grammatically Challenged. It provides tips for using Google Docs to draft your posts. You can do this on a PC or a smart phone. Google Docs will point out errors in grammar and punctuation, which you can then fix by clicking on them.

Following those guidelines can really help to improve your writing and result in greater rewards. Good luck and keep writing!