Simi is an artist and an explorer who wants to make friends and be out in the world. It's very sad that her parents won't let her explore as she would like to.

As usual, I have some feedback for you! Do you remember my comments on this story? I shared with you how to determine where to end a sentence, because you like to string multiple sentences together with a comma instead of a period. So, consider this lesson 2. 😄

I'll just mention your first paragraph:

Simi was born in a small Africa community, her parents had her in their fifties which was a common thing in their small town because they were uncivilized. They depended on nature for everything, they never wanted to be part of the noisy and polluted world.

That is four sentences. In each place where you have a comma, it should be a period, like this:

Simi was born in a small Africa community. Her parents had her in their fifties which was a common thing in their small town because they were uncivilized. They depended on nature for everything. They never wanted to be part of the noisy and polluted world.

Essentially, if it's possible to add a period after a phrase, then that means it is a complete sentence. For example, you wouldn't put a period after something like this:

The air

That is clearly an incomplete sentence. But if you write the following, it is a complete sentence, and must end in a period:

The air is clean.

If you then add another sentence, it must not be added after a comma. For example, this is incorrect:

The air is clean, I am happy that it's a nice day.

You would have to write it like this for it to be correct:

The air is clean. I am happy that it's a nice day.

I hope that helps you to spot the places in your stories where you should change the comma to a period.

Good luck and keep writing!