I enjoyed your story, @george-dee. People with limited means can really struggle to pay for their education and achieve their dreams. I liked George's approach to the conflict. I wish that would happen with conflicts in the world in real life!

I have some feedback for you that I hope will help you on your writing journey.

In this story, you combine separate sentences as one sentence. These are called "run-on sentences," or "comma splices."

Here's a simple example. These two ideas are separate sentences:

I own a cat.

I own a dog.

So it would not be correct to write these two sentences as if they are one sentence:

I own a cat, I own a dog.

Now, let's look at a few sentences in your story.

George was already crying his eyes out, he wished to go to school like every other child but things were difficult.

That is two sentences, so they must be separated by a period instead of a comma.

George was already crying his eyes out. He wished to go to school like every other child but things were difficult.

Or, you could add a word to conjoin the sentences, like this:

George was already crying his eyes out, because he wished to go to school like every other child, but things were difficult.

There are quite a few sentences like that in your story, where you combine two completely separate ideas into one sentence. Here's one more example:

He worked on the farm to save up for exams, George was keen on getting educated because he didn't want to continue from the hardship his parents would leave behind for him.

This should be:

He worked on the farm to save up for exams. George was keen on getting educated because he didn't want to continue from the hardship his parents would leave behind for him.

In The Ink Well, we like to help our community members to improve their writing skills. I hope that is helpful to you!