Hi @fantom22. I just had a chance to read this story. I think it's a very clever concept! The friends who set up the surprise certainly came up with a doozy of a trick. It made for a fun surprise at the end of the story.

I hope you are open to some feedback. I thought I would mention that there are a few places where I stumbled over the language and some errors that you probably could have caught if you took just a bit more time to carefully review the story. There are sentences that start with a lower case letter, for example. And there are some incorrect words.

In the following paragraph, "losses" is not the right word for a distance. And suddenly the island is called "Tango," where it was previously called "Tengo." There is also some incorrect punctuation after the word "beautiful." And the word "chortens" means Buddhist shrine, so it could not be something that grows in a forest. 😄

The driver of this motor boat was well-versed with the sea of that area, and he was aware of every detail there, after traveling for 5 losses by motor boat, they all reached Tango Island, the view of this island was very beautiful. , white sandy shores, forests of chortens and lush green trees, lined with coconut, date palms, and other fruit trees.

It might help you to use Google docs to draft your stories, as we describe in the article Help for the Grammatically Challenged. It indicates errors in grammar and punctuation. You might find it useful!

One other tip is that when you have two phrases that are each a complete sentence, they should be separated by a period, not a comma. The way you can determine this is if each of the phrases in the sentence can stand alone as its own sentence, then it must be separated from the phrase before it by a period. Here is an example.

These four friends took help from their homes, collected their savings, and then reached Colombo by plane, they hired a high speed motor boat from Colombo beach.

The last part is a separate sentence, so it should be written like this:

These four friends took help from their homes, collected their savings, and then reached Colombo by plane. They hired a high speed motor boat from Colombo beach.

I hope those tips are helpful!