Hi @cryptofi. I enjoyed reading your story.

I hope you're okay with a little helpful feedback!

You did a nice job with the flow of the story, and revealing Eric's health issue. Your dialog is very good too. Your story would be improved with a little more development. For example, what exactly does Eric see? If your story shared this with us, it would highlight how amazing it is that he can finally enjoy these things. What if they passed a candy store, a flower shop, and a child walking along holding a red balloon on a string? Details can bring a story to life, and make the reader more engaged.

Also, as a reminder, if you use Google docs, you can fix many of your grammar issues and typos. It's a free and very easy-to-use app which you can use on a mobile device or computer. You can download it here or get it on Google Play or the Apple store. I think it works on any device. (Once you write the story, you can select all of the content to copy it and then paste it into your Hive post. On a mobile device, you have to tap a couple of times. It's super easy.)

Also, if you take the time to read through your story before publishing, I think you would see that there are things to fix. For example, here are the third and fourth sentences, with the typos highlighted:

A lot of people were at the bus station, it wwe crowded with people. The two guys were teenagers going for a party, there were discussing and making noise inside the bus.

Keep writing!