@edystringz, I find two scenes in your story that I feel need a little clarity :-

1. You have the man (husband) sitting with his back against the wall, but then he’s looking out of the window behind him. (Not possible in my mind)
2. You have the doctor sitting on the bed, but then he comes across to the bed from elsewhere (is he sitting on the bed or not?)

Your tale is imaginative and enthralling, I would appreciate some finer perspective.