Hey there, @deraaa,

Your story captivated me right from the outset.

As a septuagenarian myself, my wife also in her mid 70's, I identify strongly with the scene and the emotions you've captured so well here.

My only small encouragement might be for you to go back and do a careful edit for a few relatively minor deficiencies in English—grammar details such as number, tense, an occasional misspelled word...

Apart from that, please don't change a thing in this brilliant, evocative story!

😄😇😉