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That's a strong hook at the end for the next story, about why you can't show us the device. I think you did a good job structuring this, too, in that you didn't tell us right away how he felt about you, but let that be the climax. I did kind of suspect that you were heading there, simply because of how thoughtful he was being. Good job on this. :)
RE: A Surprise For The 'Anti-Surprise' Girl