Hey, @unyime1. I thoroughly enjoyed your stories, I would like to share 2 notes before I get into them.

A) May I suggest using tools like (") or (-) just to make it clearer when it's a character speaking rather than the narrator.

B) Maybe put the story together in one post, even at the risk it would be longer. I believe it would make it easier to appreciate it. You're more likely to get rewards from a short story than a serialized one.

Now regarding the story. I find each action sequence and its connectivity to the next done very well. You have done an extraordinary job at giving each character life in spite of having many, I could still tell how each character is like. The characters weren't used to just keep the plot going.

Nice work, keep up the good work.