Hello @ubani1,
I just read your story, after the edits. This is the first time I'm seeing the story and I can't discern any deficits. Whatever it is that you changed, the story reads great the way it is.

Let me say how much we appreciate your positive presence in the Ink Well community. Your writing has become really good. The arc here is strong.

About the violence: try to understand how hard it is for us to parse which violent scenes are acceptable and which are not. Try to understand that we have to be consistent, as much as possible in challenging violent content, or it gets out of hand.

Sometimes an author may feel a story needs violence in order to be effective. That is rarely true. Often our imagination and skill can suggest horror without actually describing it. However, if ever you feel that a story absolutely must contain a violent scene, then use your good judgement please and don't publish that story here, in the Ink Well. There may be nothing wrong with the story. We just don't want graphic violence in our community.

Finally, thank you for your cooperation. Thank you for politely conforming to our community requirements. I personally have enjoyed reading the stories you publish here. I look forward to reading many more.

Regards,
AG