Hello @manouche,
What a wonderful story! A grand debut in the Ink Well community. You draw us into the scene so vividly. The motivation of the characters clear. You can write! :)

I was delighted to see references to hip hop/break dancing, and also to find your connection to dance described with such effect.

The last line is perfect:

Anokhi watched her brother on the big screen in his dressing room and smiled, "But it should have been me”.

The complexity of emotion is captured there. We can rejoice in someone's success and yet have a lingering sense of our own loss. This complexity makes the character relatable.

Thank you for finding the community and posting your story here. Welcome!!