You held my attention in this story, @kilvnrex. I actually wanted to find out what was going on, what had happened to you. I wanted to know who the person was who had come in your room, and how that related to your distress.

It's no small matter to make me wonder--I read a lot of stories and they all begin to sound a lot alike after a while. This one caught my attention. Good writing does that.

However, you disappointed me! Don't do that :) I need to know what it was about the other students that bothered your mother. This is critical to understanding what happened to you. Were the other students drug addicts? Were they of a different social status? From a different cultural background? Parents disapprove for many reasons. Why did yours?

The story was good. That's why I want to know. I wouldn't have cared if you, as a writer, hadn't made me.

Thanks for sharing this intense experience.