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Hello fantom22@fantom22. I read your story earlier but didn't get a chance to comment as agmoore.

I liked the end a lot:

mom, I have felt the frequency of that invisible power around me many times before.
Sarah could not understand whether this was a dream or just Richard's love.

What I like is that you don't provide a magical solution. You allow the possibility that something mystical has happened, but the reader can decide (May I suggest that you capitalize Mom at the beginning of the paragraph? When you address Mom like that it's a proper noun. Small issue. No big deal)

Good story. Thanks for responding to the prompt.

@agmoore: Hello @fantom22. | Ecency