I love this story, @emeka. You have a whole system built into it. The evil Kal Zybrog. The noble Kai. The traitorous Zuma. The strong women who are willing to fight and protect their families.

Flame throwers. Red Zone. I can go on. You must have been thinking about this for a while, because it is so involved.

I welcome you to the Ink Well, and to Hive. If you want suggestions about how to make your writing more effective, you are in the right place. There are three curators here and we all love writing. We love helping.

Your ideas, you imagination, your character development--all rich. I hope to read more from you and I hope you don't mind if from time to time we offer suggestions about how you may polish your writing style.

Thanks for writing this most dynamic story.