Hello @cryptofi,
You took this story into an unusual direction. That's always a good thing. Keeps readers interested. You created a relatable narrator, Jackson John, who is witness to the events. You allow us to share Jackson's wonder at the marvel of the new design.

You did a good job in holding readers' attention. There were a couple of grammatical issues which, if corrected, would significantly improve the readability of the story. Nonetheless, an interesting, original concept.

Keep writing!