That was quite a beautiful piece. I look to the direction, and possibly conclusion, of this story. I will follow you to keep up with that.
Could I suggest you just correct the typo in sentence "...and folder it in half..." Sure you meant "folded" there. I will edit out the second part of my comment once I am sure you've seen that. Cheers and keep steeming!
RE: The Barrens (NaNoWriMo Day 1)