Ahhh this is amazing, the way it opens so innocently, like walking into a room and the floor giving way straight into the mind of the killers. How you start focused on the moment, and the set up the segway into him remembering the murder, very skilfully done. You definitely haven't lost your knack of delivering a story that packs a punch whilst carries easily to the reader.
The murder being triggered by the divorce papers, the unintended attack, and the line about dealing with it right away before the weight of what he has done hits him, he becomes a relatable character. Especially that it was the thought of her leaving entirely that pushed over the edge that took her forever. The fact that he has built up telling himself he did this to stop her taking the kids really comes back so wonderfully later.
There is a grim sense of humour in the early parts of this, that build to the black crescendo of contemplating telling his children, and then the nod back to how he has justified it, and the thought of that reasoning verbalised to them.
But then the ending, I very much took it as the perfect dark touch of humor, how many people were out there making sure they got to the evidence first! Very much enjoyed this ❤️
RE: [Short Story] - Open Dump